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Post by klops on Apr 27, 2010 16:18:30 GMT -5
I haven't Asperger but I love your story You telling these stories very interesting. You have a great talent for writing I'm impressed by your story. and I'm glad that everything ended well science is beautiful
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Post by argionember on Apr 27, 2010 16:30:51 GMT -5
@ ral365, I like both, but I remember the fond memories of the orignal back when you first put it up about half a year ago. But you probaly overwrote the orignal to make this, so...yeah... :/ Are you going to put up did it for you and monkey's uncle too? Lem says she really wants her art trade fic back and, if you still have the first version, can you put that up? -Cody The Maverick
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Post by ral365 on Apr 27, 2010 16:34:45 GMT -5
@codythemaverick
Well, since I DID trade art w/ Lem, I guess it's only fair I give it back, but I deleted "I Did it for You" because then, why would people wanna wait a long time to see more of Slasher12's comic based on it? I'm not criticizing Kim; I'm just saying putting up the original fic defeats the purpose of waiting to see Slasher's comic.
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Post by breezyrulez on Apr 27, 2010 19:26:08 GMT -5
Probably the best story I've ever read. Literally, better than some of my favorite books. Incredible job, Ral.
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Post by ral365 on Apr 27, 2010 19:29:41 GMT -5
@breezyrulez Thank you so much! What did you like best about it? And I'm just curious, do you have Asperger's, too? 'Cause I know there are a lot of Aspies on this forum.
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Post by argionember on Apr 27, 2010 19:48:07 GMT -5
@ ral365, I understand, it does defeat the purpose, but she said that she printed the story so maybe she can repost it once she's done with the comic...idk :/ Anyway, do you still have the orignal version of gift or curse? I'm guessing not...
-Cody The Maverick
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Post by ral365 on Apr 27, 2010 20:22:53 GMT -5
@codythemaverick No, I'm sorry. I changed the original to the current version you see now. I changed it because I thought the old one was too predictable, and the new one had deeper conflict, additional subplots, and more meaningful messages & symbolism in between.
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Post by argionember on Apr 28, 2010 5:16:50 GMT -5
@ ral365, I see, I guess it was just your opinion that it was like that, but the old one was good too. I kinda liked the plot of Sam breaking up with Flint in the old one, but still. -Cody The Maverick
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Post by Yellow Dragon on Apr 28, 2010 16:03:13 GMT -5
Well... Last chapter was very good. It's a pity, that reality can't be so kind.
About all fic.
Story. Interesting and has a good meaning. Adventure parts are very enthralling. But, generally, story contains a couple of scientific inaccuracies, in my opinion.
Narrating. Very good too. I like your style.
Characters. All characters are showed very vell, but I still have one note to Flint's behaviour. Sorry, but I can't understand why you image him so hysterical and lachrymose. It was made negative impression on me, when I first time saw Slasher12's comic, based on your story.
Your stories are good, but full of sadness and lachrymose. And this make me feel bad sometimes.
Sorry, if I said something that you don't like. I only want to be candid.
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Post by ral365 on Apr 28, 2010 16:35:12 GMT -5
Thanks, Yellow Dragon and cloudyfan, for your honest critique and constructive criticism. I have to admit, I DID think this story was kind of depressing, but then again, what would you expect? Flint spent his entire life with an Autistic condition and the problems from it, and he never even knew he had it until age 25. That has to be really hard to deal with. Flint was hysterical because many Aspies' can be extremely confident about one incident, and deep despair or anxiety in another, because of their black-and-white way of thinking, and we see quite a bit of Flint's black-and-white way of thinking in the real movie. Aspies tend to go emotionally overboard with problems that aren't really that bad. Because Flint didn't understand his Asperger's very well, his emotions got the better of his judgment, and thought that his love of science was just a figment of his disordered mind, like how a Schizophrenic sees people that aren't really there. That's another trait that he has from Asperger's; many Aspies make choices with good intentions, but not always the best judgment. Plus, how can people not be happy with Flint changing who he is? We love the old Flint, and that's what he discovers when Sam, Tim, and the others help him understand it better. I know the story was depressing, but I wrote what would happen based on what would seem the most realistic while staying true to the movie, characters, and how someone with Asperger's would think or act. In real life, having Asperger's is never easy, and can often be really depressing (I have it, too), but like the quote at the bottom, Aspies can, and very often do, excel in real life when they believe in their special gifts, and have enough guidance from their friends and family to help them. P.S. Cloudyfan, how come you deleted your message?
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Post by Yellow Dragon on Apr 28, 2010 16:49:21 GMT -5
ral365: You're right. Simply sad stories makes me feel myself not so good.
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Post by ral365 on Apr 28, 2010 16:51:47 GMT -5
Yellow DragonI understand. I don't like stories that are really depressing either. I could've made mine more cheerful, but I was trying to keep it real. Thanks a lot though for your honest critique. I really appreciate your helpful advice. P.S. I'm not at all saying that your thoughts are wrong or anything. I'm not saying that what you thought about my fanfiction was wrong.
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Post by KJ on Apr 28, 2010 20:07:52 GMT -5
I really like this version better from the old one. the ending was so cute and funny.
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Post by ral365 on Apr 28, 2010 20:09:55 GMT -5
KJ"You lie this version better?" What was there to lie about? lol, Just kidding! Thanks a lot, Kim! I'm just curious, what did you like about this version that made it better than the old one? A couple of people have actually said that they like the old one better.
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Post by breezyrulez on Apr 28, 2010 20:51:33 GMT -5
@ral - Well, I loved all of the wording you used and how you didnt use just little words like 'good' or 'a lot'. I also loved how you made the characters sound just how they really do wait... does that make sense? xD No, I don't have Aspergers... sometimes I think I'm wrong, because I act sorta like somebody with Aspergers... I think?
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