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Post by klops on May 11, 2010 17:56:31 GMT -5
You show Flint's sensitivity very well and you are running a very nice narration and you're welcome
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Post by breezyrulez on May 11, 2010 19:38:07 GMT -5
HHH!!! Awwh, I love it!!! So cute! Another amazing piece of work, Ral!
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Post by ral365 on May 12, 2010 16:28:15 GMT -5
@breezyrulez Aww thanks! I'm really glad you liked it. What did you like best about it?
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Post by breezyrulez on May 12, 2010 16:40:54 GMT -5
I really liked how Sam "Screamed like a fanatic fan girl" xD I also love Sam's kind and comforting words to flint. The wording in these stories are just amazing!
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Post by ral365 on May 12, 2010 18:59:55 GMT -5
@breezyrulez Thanks for the feedback. Yeah, I bet a lot of fans can see Sam getting as excited about weather as the average Twilight fangirl. And Sam's spent her entire life learning to live with her condition, so she makes the perfect caregiver for Flint while he's still learning about his Asperger's.
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Post by KJ on May 12, 2010 22:52:08 GMT -5
Good job I like the opening part with Flint in that session
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Post by ral365 on May 12, 2010 22:57:56 GMT -5
KJThanks, Kim! I'm really glad you liked it. That scene was actually based the sort of therapy I had for my Asperger's when I was a kid.
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Post by ral365 on May 13, 2010 15:24:53 GMT -5
KJAlso, I can't wait to see more of "I Did it for You"
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Post by vhills on May 13, 2010 18:19:51 GMT -5
well, it really seems quite realistic, and i like the way you make flint and sam interact with each other. you really did a good job with expressing flint's fears and other feelings in general as well. :]
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Post by ral365 on May 13, 2010 19:28:52 GMT -5
vhillsThanks. This is actually based on a real sensory overload I had a few weeks ago, when I saw my friends' high school musical, "Sweeney Todd." I thought that maybe readers could really get a feel of what a sensory overload looks and feels like in the story.
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Post by hellavet on May 24, 2010 1:03:48 GMT -5
aww Flint can be romantic ;] in the nerdy, awesome kinda way. This is very well-written and right to the point. The descriptions were point on and I thought it was cute that Flint supported Sam, even though he wasn't exactly looking forward to going. You should write more about Flint, maybe based off one of the roleplays anyway, just letting you know you write wonderfully and I enjoy reading your work, keep it up
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Post by ral365 on May 24, 2010 22:28:49 GMT -5
hellavetAww, thank you so much for your honest critique. This was actually based on a recent sensory overload I had at my good friend's high school musical, "Sweeney Todd." Maybe I will make more of my fics based on RPs; we come up with such awesome adventures!!!
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Post by RainbowLuvsFlint on Jan 4, 2011 23:06:23 GMT -5
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww cute
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Post by Remorse on Apr 11, 2011 13:56:55 GMT -5
Aw I really liked it Ral :')
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Post by smf on Sept 7, 2013 9:55:37 GMT -5
Heh. This fic of yours is pretty great, Ral! I like it.
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